极端主义造成的社会

师哈哈达人

　　Death of Extremism Results from Death of Social Care
　　To move or not to move, a dilemma that had been plaguing Weng Biao for two months was finally resolved in a burning way. With his two-room shack knocked down by the government＇s bulldozer, Weng made a desperate attempt of pouring a can of gasoline on himself and sparking a fire.He was dead,which raised the tension between the government and the inhabitants to move greater than ever. So who is to blame? No specific culprit but the society itself. It is the ill social response to those in need that led to the behavior of extremism and the ensuing un
　　Weng＇s story typifies the buddyship between social instability and extreme behavior. The bulldozer not only pulled down the family＇s shelter but their last hope of getting the justice done as well. Without home, without fear. It is the boldness from despair that ignited the wanton breach of social rule, which basically comes in the form of extreme behavior like self-burning. Turmoil, the state of rulelessness,thus started.
　　But where＇s the society? Has it ever done something to stop the tragedy? No! All we can see is silence till the burning day.And the worse is yet to come. In the case of Zhang Xinpin, a depressed boy who jumped out of the building to death because of wowing from the spectators.Society simply facilitates the sad end by inducing the victim to the extreme.
　　Throw the cards of neglect and instigation into the trash box, and we get the trump. That is the care for others. If Weng Biao had been given a chance to pour his worry to somebody and
　　that person offered to lend a hand, the fire could probably have been avoided even though the demolition went on. Why? Because a sense of being cared about is gained. Weng, formerly fought by himself, now found something to rely on. Similarly, if the society approaches the extremist-to-be, listens to his suffering and does some supportive things (comforting words, donation.., an ything will do), the horrible decision, once as stiff as a poker,will mostly be given up.
　　Yet, the problem is not over. What if the extreme behavior really happens? Which role should the society play?
　　First, the dignity of the victim himself deserves full respect.Blaming the victim for his stupidity only irritates the kind of people sharing the same suffering.
　　Second, the cause of the event should be publicized if it has anything to do with most people＇s interest. Otherwise, Rumors will erode people＇s trust in the society while turmoil can well be stirred up by the widespread anxiety.
　　Last, the problem that brings about the tragedy is supposed to get a solution. It can be the establishment and modification of laws, or simply more attention to the group of people in need.
　　It counts how we do to curb the extreme behavior for the sake of social stability. The best policy, as I said before, is to care for the people in trouble, make the event known to the public if necessary and heal the defect hidden behind.
　　简评
　　这是一篇很有特色的GRE作文。一提起GRE作文，很多同学马上就将其与academic writing，与good read English等同起来。因此，很多同学拼命写出一些连自己都似懂非懂的非常正式的句子。因为不懂，这些句子其实自己很难写出来；惟一的门路只有靠“模板”——用模板“拼”文章。这样制造出来的文章难免千人一面，难免有抄袭嫌疑，也就难怪一些考G同学被判“死刑”，一些写作本来不错的同学考试归来成绩平平，大呼郁闷。其实对ETS评分标准稍有研究的人都知道最重要的是思想内容的深刻思路清晰。另外，这篇文章的语言也非常有特色：to move or not to move;and the worse is yet to come等精炼的句子都显示出作者深厚的英语功底。