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假定你是李华，想邀请外教 Herry 一起参观中国剪纸(paper-cutting)艺术展。请给他写封邮件，内容包括：
1. 展览时间、地点;
2. 展览内容。
注意：
1. 词数100左右;
2. 可以适当增加细节，已使行文连贯。
学生实例1 分数：24分 四川德阳中学
Dear Henry
I'm Li Hua, the leader of the paper-cutting club in our school. Last time you told me you looked forward to learning more about traditional Chinese culture. Now I'm glad to tell you there will be a Chinese paper-cutting exhibition held by our school. I sincerely hope you can set aside some time for the art feast.
The exhibition, the theme of which is "beauty of China", will take place in the school hall from 2 to 5 on the afternoon of June 21. Not only will our club's works be displayed, but we also have a valuable set of paper-cutting created by a famous artist of this field. Besides, there will be a lot of useful and interesting activities, from which you can have a clearer picture of Chinese culture.
I would appreciate it if you accept my invitation. I'm sure it can leave a wonderful impression on you! I'm looking forward to your reply.
Best wishes!
Yours,
Li Hua
1. 逻辑性较好，层次分明，连贯恰当;
2. 运用词块、句型丰富;
3. 个别用词需要改进比如说leader, leave a wonderful impression不符英语表达习惯;
4. 第一段不够简洁。
学生实例2 分数：23.5分 岳池中学
Dear Henry,
I have known that a Chinese paper-cutting exhibition whose subject is about Chinese festivals will be held in our city.
Knowing that you have a great interest in Chinese traditional culture, I am writing the e-mail to invite you to visit the exhibition together with me. The exhibition will be held in the museum from 9a.m. to 7pm. on June 15th, which will last for only one day. On that day, the works of paper-cutting artists from all over China will be exhibited in the museum. Just as I have told you, it is about Chinese traditional festivals. Therefore, in the exhibition, not only can the skills of these paper-cutting artists be enjoyed, but also you can know more about the customs of our Chinese traditional festivals from these beautiful works.
Time permitting, please contact me. I am looking forward to visiting the exhibition together with you.
Yours,
Li Hua
1. 覆盖了全部要点，使用了较多语法结构和词汇;
2. 没有明显语法错误;
3. 硬伤：主题句不够突出;
4. 句式套用比较生硬：例如：not only but also; time permitting…
学生实例3 分数：22.5 吉林 磐石一中
Dear Henry,
Our school will hold a paper-cutting exhibition. It's a great honor for me to invite you as a special guest. Paper-cutting is an indispensable style of art. Therefore, I hold the opinion that this show is of extreme significance.
Main points are as follows. To begin with, it will start at 9:00 on 15th Jun and last for one week in our auditorium. Besides, a wide range of activities will be held, including the competitions between different classes, which will be the highlight of this show. Last but not least, taking advantage of this golden opportunity, we can not only enhance our understanding of Chinese indigenous culture, but also enrich our cultural life.
All in all, I'm longing to see you soon.
1. 覆盖了全部要点，行文流畅
2. 结构清晰，使用了较多复杂的语法结构和高级词汇;
3. 个别连接词,过渡句使用有些生硬、突兀。例如：Main points are as follows. |
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发表于 2021-2-25 06:42:05
